What are the potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change and how they can be arrested?
It is admittedly that we are currently facing a dominating issue concerning our mother Earth—global warming. Although the scientific and technological revolution has led human beings a luxurious and convenient life, this blessing ceases to be a tremendous advantage when it has simultaneously brought us into a life of devastation. As a matter of fact, global warming, or simply defined as the gradual rise of Earth’s temperature, is caused by a phenomenon called the greenhouse effect. Scientists believe that the emission of greenhouse gases, especially carbon dioxide is the major contribution to global warming. Accordingly, it is imperative for us to explore the potential aftermath of global warming in terms of climate change and subsequently map out compatible strategies to resolve this issue to its minimum.
One of the feasible impacts of global warming has to deal with the geographical change of the Earth. Sea-level rise is an inevitable consequence. Chris Woodford (2006) illustrates that the expansion of sea water and the melting of glaciers and ice sheets are driving up the sea-level. The IPCC estimates that sea levels will rise between 0.18 and 0.59 meters by 2099. Besides, Holli Riebeek (2007) indicates that the rising sea-level will cause more frequent coastal flooding. Global warming may also shift major climate patterns as well as prolong and intensify current catastrophes. There will also be paradoxical phenomenon where a country is facing severe drought at the same time a neighbouring country is having horrendous flood. The rapid disappearance of ice shelf in Antartica and the dramatic topographical change in Greenland are several instances demonstrating the effects of global warming.
Apart from that, global warming may also disturb the world’s ecosystem when the loss of species and lives occur. According to Albert Gore (2007), species loss is now occurring at a rate of 1000 times greater than the natural background rate. A case in point, the warming oceans are bleaching the coral reefs and this has put most of the fish species in jeopardy. Moreover, the erratic climate change will also bring disastrous effects on human beings all over the world. Hotter summers will lead to more cases of heat stroke and deaths. Resurgent infectious diseases are predicted to emerge and cause further deceases. The intensifying catastrophes such as hurricanes, tornadoes and typhoons will sacrifice millions of lives too.
Realising the deleterious impacts we may get from global warming, more pragmatic measures should be implemented to arrest this obstinate problem. Reducing the emissions of carbon dioxide and using energy efficiently are those steps that should be put in precedence. For instances, buy energy-efficient appliances, recycle, plant more trees and switch to renewable energy such as solar energy. We can also practise car-pooling, use a bicycle or walk instead of drive a car, or maybe use a hybrid car if possible. In addition, according to Albert Gore (2007), he says that when the warnings are accurate and based on sound science, then we as human beings, whatever country we live in, have to find a way to make sure that the warnings are heard and responding too.
After all is said and done, global warming has the potential to bring us disastrous consequences. The current anomalous climate change should act as a portent to all of us that we are going to reap as we have sown for the worsening global warming. As what Albert Gore (2007) says, we are witnessing a collision between our civilization and the Earth. One may concern about the economic growth when measures of using less energy are carried out, but have we ever thought that how are we going to enjoy the affluence if we do not have a healthy Earth? Ergo, it is up to us as human beings to make the right decision. The fact is, we do have the ability to avert this issue and secure the nature for our next generation.
1. Is there a clear introductory sentence that introduces the subject matter and the controlling idea? What do you suggest for improvement if the introductory sentence is not clear?
ReplyDeleteThere is a clear introductory sentence but you introduce your controlling idea first after that only followed by main subject matter. May be this is one of the interesting ways to start your essay. It would be better if you start your introduction by pointing out the main subject matter and introduces the topic of the essay in the general and simple way. It is better to start with a very general comment about the subject to attract the reader’s attention and indicate the area of the topic of the essay.
2. Is there a thesis statement given as the last sentence of the introductory paragraph? Is it clear and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraphs?
Yes, the last sentence of your introductory sentence is thesis statement which covered what you are going to write in the body paragraphs. It is clear and interesting way of writing.
3. Do the paragraphs have sufficient supporting details and examples? How can the organization be improved?
In your first paragraph, your main topic sentence is geographical change of the earth. However, you are more focus on the rising of sea level while the others supporting details
are explained in one sentence with no clear example. You also can give a few examples of the countries which would experience the effects following in the increase of the sea level instead of explaining using facts.
Overall you have point out your topic sentence in the first line of the paragraphs with sufficient supporting details.
4. Are there any paragraphs which are not supported well?
As I said in question 3, generally there are sufficient supporting details.
5. Are there any sentences or sections that are not clear? If so, how can they be improved?
I think it is clear enough although there are certain parts like this sentence: resurgent infectious diseases are predicted to emerge and cause further deceases. How it is linked to global warming??? How the warming brings to the diseases. There is no explanation on this point but I know if you explain so much it will exceed the word limit.
6. Does the conclusion summarize all the main points given in the essay or restate the thesis statement? Is it clear? If not, how can the writer improve this part?
Yes, you chose to restate the thesis statement instead of summarizing all the main points. Although your thesis sentence is not really straight forward but I think it is clear enough.
7. Does the writer cite the sources adequately and appropriately? Note any incorrect citation.
Some citations are different from mine. So it is better for both of us to discuss after this and correct the mistakes. May be mine one is wrong.
8. Are there any apparent grammatical or spelling mistakes?
Seriously I am not very good in grammar but after I have read your essay generally there is no any apparent grammatical and spelling mistake.
9. Does the writer comprehensively cover appropriate materials available from the standard sources? If no, what is missing?
Overall, your essay covered all the appropriate materials available given by miss dil.
10. Additional comments:
Nice essay with good vocabularies.
One more thing: stick to the word limit